Overall, I liked the singing and dancing--the singing less than the dancing--and I found the insight into Indian culture with their attitudes towards arranged marriages interesting. But it was . . . odd. I'm not sure if my Midwestern American film sensibilities are quite ready for Bollywood does Jane Austen.
500 on "A Thread of Silk" with some editing/rewriting.
Ran into a bit of awkwardness, plot-wise, and I'm mulling how to handle it. It comes down to the old LARP dilemma. I need to incorporate travel into the story because my protag is journeying from point A to point B. But:
- There's no other purpose for the traveling bit other than to get her to point B, which makes it ungodly dull.
- As problematic as it is, there's no getting around my protag being at point A and needing to get to point B. I can't bring antag. and protag. together anywhere but at point B.
- I could make the journey interesting, but that would require adding an extraneous scene (possibly several), and I'm trying to keep this story tight.
- Another reason to avoid a traveling scene is that my protag is riding a horse. Not only will I exhaust my limited knowledge of Heian Era Japanese horsemanship in the first few paragraphs, but I'll inevitably give the horse a personality if my protag spends any amount of "onscreen" time with her mount--since horses have them, and I can't imagine anyone sitting on a horse without chatting to and otherwise interacting with it. But I don't want to create another character to worry about. As is, I got annoyed with the servants in the opening scene, and they had an important raison d'être. At my first opportunity, I dumped them.
4,904 / 7,500
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